Wednesday, April 2, 2008

Rhyme Enough At Last

In this limerick now, a haiku
Nineteen syllables long, minus two
This first line has five
And seven more here, no jive
This also has five --There, I’m through.

7 comments:

surlyh said...

While it be brave to stretch the form and try something new…it might also be foolish.

Oh Backthrow, this might be the worst
To blow at two forms is a first
This sucks as haiku
And limerick, too
Both gasket and spleen you have burst!

Backthrow said...

Your critique, well thanks much for sharing
'Tis the price paid for acting so daring
Looks like my dual-poem
Ain't much to write ho-ome
Instead, should I sing like Fred Waring?

surlyh said...

Not really, it wasn't that bad
But missed, by a tad, being "rad"
I was being a jerk
Keep up the good work
And I'll just keep being a cad

Norm Knott said...

There's no place like home, do not stray
The rules can't be broke, they all say
The line must be towed
The row must be hoed
To elsewhere, attention, don't pay

Backthrow said...

Not to worry, my bags aren't yet packed
T'was a noble attempt, but it lacked
Both as haiku and lim
It was sans "oomph" and "vim"
The forms' cards all against me were stacked

surlyh said...

And speaking of stacked, check that, Jack
That must put a strain on her back
That gal sure can carry
I think I will marry
The girl holding up the wine rack

Norm Knott said...

I'd love to be walking a breast
And kilt when to die for was dressed
This makes little sense
Not even ha'pence
But I took a stab like a guest